mohawkade's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Coffee]

P.S. Set an automated coffee brewer as your alarm clock, so at a certain point in the morning when you need to rise, you're coaxed out of bed by the smell of fresh coffee.

[Mad Max: Kung Fury Road]

Hilarious concept throughout, Animation and Sound design were spotty at best but the Voice Acting was Spot-on!

Some suggestions I have to improve this for a reupload (something Newgrounds excels at over YouTube):

Some of the shots can be shortened a tad

Silhouetted figure walk cycle could do with more work. Try throwing a Sun in the background with a drop-shadow under max. (Max's walk cycle can be put into a symbol, duplicated then placed underneath and brightness dropped to 0, also with maybe a pinch of blur for greater effect) Look up pictures of people in deserts as a reference for color schemes.

When Kung Fury pops in, maybe try extending the background music up until the point when Max holds up Kung Fury at gunpoint, just fading the volume down a bit when the dialogue starts. Try it and see how it holds up.

SOUND IS KEY! Have some continuous background ambient sound (blowing wind, etc), perhaps add some subtle cloth rubbing sound effects when the characters move. Max's gun could use with some subtle weapon's foley fx (sound of the gun rattling).

Fury's last line is out of sync, however you could play this to your advantage, just cut it short and give the line some reverb to make it sound as if he's thinking aloud.

Again, just some helpful suggestions for improvement.

Paxilon responds:

Paxilon Sez:
Ah, thanks! It`s funny, as soon as I started fooling around in flash I forgot some of the most basic rules of art and drawing--use references, save a few versions of your work (for gods sake do it) and... read some basic tutorials. Also somehow I ended up with my tablet stylus up my nose. Hot tip, don`t do that, it can claphg brlain dummuge.
I think you`d be terrified if i showed you the raw flash document, its a regular Frankensteins monster, heh. I learned so much over the course of animating this dumb little thing and I`m taking all your current tips (and hopefully future ones!) to heart. Thanks again, hopefully I`ll catch you again in the next toon!

SirUndead Sez:
Thanks a bunch dude, these are some great tips! All the animation stuff goes over my head, but the sound stuff I can respond to. I did try extending the theme that far out (because I liked the theme so much hahah) but I really wanted to capture that sort of maddened awkwardness which the movie had such an awesome amount of. Not saying I made the RIGHT choice, but that was my reason for making the WRONG choice. As for the background noise, it was in there but yeah it wasn't the whole piece, just certain moments. I had the walking in the sand noises for when they moved, but cloth rubbing together never even occured to me, so thanks a bunch for that tip, I'll have to consider that!

Dude, I so badly wanted to put in gun sound effects for every time it moved like you said, but I couldn't get the right sound, hopefully for next time I feature a gun I can get that right. And as for the last line being out of sync, this was actually entirely deliberate, you may be able to notice, all of Kung Fury's lines are out of sync while Max's are pretty in-sync. We wanted to capture how Kung Fury's lines were occasionally kinda out of sync in the actual movie, but clearly we need to work on making this clearer, or perhaps dropping a joke like that entirely if it risks just coming off as low quality.
Anyway thanks dude, you're the best and I really appreciate these tips from somebody like you! I'll DEFINITELY be thinking of this stuff next go around. Have a good one!

[Wild Fur]

This is some good work Howard! Could be perfect with some more sound mixing but due to the deadline you had I understand you had to omit that detail. Overall, very well done!

HowardWimshurst responds:

thanks man! Hope you are doing well

[Celles et Ceux des Cimes et Cieux]

Bienvenue à Newgrounds . Continuer avec cette qualité de travail et vous dominer ce site .

Welcome to Newgrounds. Continue with this quality of work and you shall dominate this site.

[Victory Smells Sweet]

That was pretty decent, actually making an attempt to flesh out a full story rather than animating a quick concept. Good work.

Could use with some sound mixing though. I've often said it before but I'll say it again here. If you have a good sound mix to complement you animation, even if it's sub-par, it'll do volumes for the entire project as a whole.

[The Reward: Tales of Alethrion - "The First Hero"]

Once again, you guys BLEW IT OUT OF THE WATER with great sound mixing, and superb story telling. ALL of my STARS to this. Kudos.

[Creation]

T'was good. But I'm a little thrown off by the low framerate

BitterBrushAnimation responds:

^~^" yeah the frame rate was cut in half. it is rendered at 12 frames per second. frankly unacceptable for computer animation. but considering i only had a month to work on it i had to cut corners somewhere....and it still took like 3 days to render (it would have taken 6 days to render at 24 FPS which was time i didn't have near the end.).. but most people barely noticed. no one in the class even mentioned it. they mostly pointed to the poor pacing in it. which i would argue is a bigger flaw embedded in the foundation of the film that i really should have ironed out more ^.^' but like i said i was on a time limit (in edition to being inexperienced with story telling.). but in the future this time limit wont be in place so any errors will be solely on my lack of skill. ^.^ thank you so much for your time and feedback! have a wonderful day.

[Five Offers at Freddy's]

Loved seeing this evolve from your initial plans to it's final feature.

hbrunav responds:

Thanks for being part of the experience!

[Markiplier FNAF 3]

Judging from the text introduction at the begining, you were making it seem like it's your first cartoon project. To which later in the video I was thinking, "Nah, this is way too polished to be made by a first timer"

A quick check of your upload history confirmed my suspicion, but that doesn't in any way take away from how well made this was. My bit of criticism is there were some bits where you had the tension building quite right, and others where you left it winding for too long. Essentially, don't let some clips drag on for too long after you've established the required information to your audience.